Song in progress

[BaiginLong]

Seeing that I've screwed up @ American Idol I'm going to take the alternate path to stardom that I'd planned out a while ago
I have a producer in Boston (Sam "DJ Dazed" Sun head of Dazed Entertainment who is also a promoter and manager) ready to get me started
yeah the company is kinda new but Sam may try to get me signed with the other Asian American music recording companies (i.e. Kamikaze, Nemesis) instead

I had a bout of inspiration as I was walking all alone at night on Friday and feeling sad and I was able to pull together a verse
I used a refrain/chorus that I had made up a while ago that I've been saving
I like how this sounds (which is a first cause I'm like my own worst critic when it comes to songwriting)
I'd like to see how you guys like this and this may be my first song that I put out
Feel free to give some input
I'll be recording and posting sample of my singing soon also once I have the time

Here's the lyrics people:

On a cold dark night
With a clear black sky
I avoid the streetlights
As I walk all alone

The cars pass by
I let out a sigh
Tryin' to keep from cryin'
Cause I can't find my way home

Chorus:
I can't take anymore
This pain in my heart
Is eating away at my mind
I miss your caress
I feel so much less
now that your no longer by my side


hehe here it is
the chorus may not fit too well and I was hoping too put the phrase "half lit moon" in there somewhere cause I saw a half moon in the sky at the time and it's anti-romantic

but yeah
another set of lyrics here (no real inspiration just trying to freestyle):

I'm all about
Drippin the honey on your thighs
I be the man that'll keep you up at night babe
Know what you want when you need it the most girl
And afterwards I'll hold you close

So please don't fight it
I'll keep ya excited
Take ya to new hights yeah
And you know you can't deny it

Chorus:
So tell me what you want babe
I'll keep you up late
And no there's no waitin' tonight ohh
I'll do it fast or slow
Get you off for sho'
We'll work it 'til the mornin' light now

feel free to give you opinions about my work and any ideas or inspirations you have
I'll make sure to give anyone who gives anything positive some credit when the songs come out on the album

[BaiginLong]

err maybe not positive but at least constructive

[applehead]

well robert. i don't think i can give any constructive criticism without hearing the lyrics accompanied by music first.
because.. a lot of good songs have really sappy lyrics.. but the music makes it better.. you know?

so.. it's a bit sappy but so are a lot of songs.. kekekeke

happy! there, i did it.

[kitty]

yeah, any way you could give us an .mp3 of your demo?

and i think the chorus works okay, if the melody makes it work...

[BaiginLong]

I said i'll have them soon so you'll finally see if I deserve to be an American Idol reject hehe

[BaiginLong]

where's a good site that I can upload the music files once I make them
I don't really wanna make a new webpage but if it's necessary I guess I might

[BaiginLong]

I could also use a good music creation/studio program.
Anyone wanna send me a copy of Acid Pro 4.0?

[BaiginLong]

CuBase even better

[kitty]

how big is the file? if it's small-ish i'd be willing to host it temporarily.

[BaiginLong]

Done with recordings.
But the '.wav's are big and I need something good to convert or re-record my stuff to .mp3
someone wanna host my stuff for me? :-P

[BaiginLong]

yay ".wav"s now ".mp3"s

[BaiginLong]

HOLY SHIT PEOPLE!!!!
Things might be moving along soon!!!!!
Dazed Entertainment BABY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!