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[Barbs]

upon the shadowed pillars
sighs, cry a little and yet ever
gentle. the teddy slides.
silk to eat away the sorrow
by a callow youth, spent, a waste
of time, for after that it melds
away like sweet to salt.
rose panes bud
and in actuality
the moist haven beckons
as it thrusts
yet look again
and the two orchids
meld together like one.

[tapestrybabe]

errr... i dont know why you say that this poem is a little gross... maybe i'm missing something. maybe its just a something you wrote to capture ppls attention... :)

but ummm... i dont know how ppl write poems like these... when i write a poem.. it always has to rhyme. i wish i had the talent to write in this type of manner...

[SunWuKong]

i'm thinking about all kinds of sexual metaphors right now...

[tapestrybabe]

Originally posted by SunWuKung@Aug 27 2002, 11:38 PM
i'm thinking about all kinds of sexual metaphors right now...
Oooo... i get it now...
Teddy slides, moist, beckons, ... thrusts... meld together like one.

heheh.. i like it all the better now... ^_^

[Barbs]

Originally posted by tapestrybabe@Aug 28 2002, 03:16 AM
errr... i dont know why you say that this poem is a little gross... maybe i'm missing something. maybe its just a something you wrote to capture ppls attention... :)

but ummm... i dont know how ppl write poems like these... when i write a poem.. it always has to rhyme. i wish i had the talent to write in this type of manner...
hey i read ur poem about being "white" and i've always wished i could rhyme in poetry but my writing just doesn't flow like that. hehe....
except in sonnets but nobody's interested in reading sonnets these days...

yeah this poem is very sexual. it's basically about a first time sex situation and the boy/guy is really bad and quick about it too. haha....



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